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You've got her where you want her...
Lunatic, can't sleep, can't eat, head spinning,

Gritty

You take her where you want to...
Erratic, dark deep, cold weep, mind numbing,

Scourge

You give her when you want to...
Enigmatic, flesh stroke, thought provoke, soul searing,

Radiant

You leave her how you want to…
Dramatic, heart torn, rage, mourn, death quietening

Silence

You have her when you want her…
Yet she's hanging around the edges of your

peace of mind.
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This is so beautiful, and a unique way of writing which is really nice. Great atmosphere in the poem!
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*Ellyevans679 Sep 30, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Hajrija and Mirza.

Thanks you for your lovely comment, I'm really glad you liked it. I like the rhythm too :D

:heart: Elle
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:iconxeena-dragonkizz:
wow..such a powerful and greatly touching work!! Raw..and very captivating!! :heart:
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*Ellyevans679 May 31, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks Asa,

I like it when rhythms get punchy with words. There is often a lot of touching emotion carried in such rawness and I am discovering some great dA poets who write like this. :heart:
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:icon3dstage:
I don't usually find the time to slow down and read written art, but I did this time. I'm not very good at critiquing verse, but I do find this very powerful. In part sad, but contains what often may be start truth. I like this, thank you for sharing it Elle :heart:
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*Ellyevans679 May 27, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks Stagey, I'm really touched that you took the time to read it and make such encouraging comments. It is meant to be an emotional poem.
:iconheartglompplz: :tighthug: Elle
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:icon3dstage:
You're quite welcome Elle :heart: You are such a talented and artistic person and I am very happy that you are my friend :tighthug:
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*Ellyevans679 May 27, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
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:iconjanarey:
very good!
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*Ellyevans679 May 26, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you Jana. It means a lot that you like it.

BTW your ID pic is lovely, the colour, the expression and that gorgeous tattoo. Have a nice day.

:heart: Elle
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